HOPPA AND SHELLY EDITS

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NO EDITS NEEDED

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5- A ROCK MUST BE GREEN
6- A ROCK MUST BE GREEN

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2-LET'S GET YOU PERFECT LITTLE ROCKS HOME!

3-HEY, HOPPA! NEW ROCKS I SEE! ANY PRETTY ROCKS FOR ME?

4-YOU DESERVE DIAMONDS BUNNITA! SO I'LL KEEP THESE DUSTY LITTLE ROCKS!

5-DON'T WORRY, LITTLE ROCKS! HOPPA IS GONNA GIVE YOU A GOOD HOME.

6-WELCOME TO WARRENVILLE. (NO TURTLES ALLOWED)

PAGE 4

2-missing period at end of sentence

3-yawn (not yawns.)

4-"ROCK" -A-BYE.     HA.

PANELS 2-4 NEED TO BE NIGHT TIME BLUE LIKE PAGE 5

PAGE 5

NO CHANGES NEEDED

PAGE 6

1-"I NEED MY BEAUTY SLEEP!"

2-"WAIT A SECOND!"     missing !

3-"ROCKS DON'T LAUGH.."    misspelled

4-"..OR CRACK.."

5-"..OR LEAVE LITTLE.."

6-".. SHELLS?"

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1-"HELLO, ROCK AND ROLLER!"    hallo mispelled

6- "AWWWW, YOU APPRECIATE TRUE COMEDIC GENIUS"

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NO CHANGES NEEDED

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4-ADD "TAP TAP" sound effect

5. SHELDON (not SHALDON)


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1. Add "EEE"

6. "WHAT DO TURTLES EAT?!" make DO bold

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1. "NOTHIN BUT.."

2. "..SOME BORING LETTUCE."

3. OOO   (from turtle)

4. "OH WOW! ROMAINE CALM, EVERYONE. WE HAVE A WINNER!"       bold romaine

5. "BUNNITA IS GONNA LOVE YOU!"

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2-"I KNOW YOU HAVE A TURTLE IN THERE!!"

4-PINK BUNNY

5-PINK EARS

6-PINK EARS

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1-"MORNING, MR. MAYOR. WHAT'S UP?"

4-PINK EARS

5-"HMM." (missing word balloon). PINK EARS

6. "SHE'S GREEN." (missing period) PINK EARS

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2-PINK EARS

4-PINK EARS

5-PINK EARS

6-"WE'VE GOTTA FIND YOUR MOMMA!" Bold GOTTA

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SHELLY PINK EARS ALL PANELS

1-"SIGH" (missing word balloon from Shelly)

2-"DON'T WORRY, SHELLY. I PROMISE I'LL KEEP YOU SAFE AND FIND YOUR MOMMA."

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ALL SHELLY'S EARS PINK

3-"MY NIECE. SHELLY!"

6-THIS PANEL IS SUPPOSED TO BE HOPPA AND SHELLY WITH HOPPA SAYING THE LINE AND PRETENDING TO BE SURPRISED.
"GASP!! SHELLY, YOU LITTLE LIAR!!"


PAGE 17

1-"WHY DIDN'T YOU JUST SAY YOU NEED TO GET HER HOME?"

2-THIS PANEL IS SUPPOSED TO BE HOPPA NOT BUNNITA. MOVE ART FROM PANEL 3 TO PANEL 2?

3. THIS PANEL IS SUPPOSED TO BE BUNNITA SMILING IN THE SAME POSE AS HOPPA HERE.

4. "OK. YOU LOOK LEFT AND WE'LL LOOK RIGHT.

6. "-THERE'S NEVER BEEN TURTLES AT THIS LAKE!"

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1-"I GOTTA GET HER HOME!"

2-THIS PANEL IS SUPPOSED TO BE BUNNITA. SAME POSE BUT SAD FACE. "BUT THERE'S NO TELLING WHERE HER HOME IS. YOU TWO COULD BE GONE FOREVER!"

4-"I MADE A PROMISE."

6-THIS PANEL IS SUPPOSED TO BE THE MAYOR NOT BUNNITA

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1-MAYOR NOT BUNNITA
"YOU KNOW THE RULES, HOPPA! NO TURTLES ALLOWED!"

3-MAYOR NOT BUNNITA.
"EVER SINCE THE TORTOISE BEAT THE HARE, TURTLES HAVE BEEN BANNED!"

5-MAYOR NOT BUNNITA. MAYOR HOLDING FACE IN PALM.
"OH NO. PLEASE DON'T SAY-"

6-"THIS IS ABOUT RACE?!"
Race in BOLD. And the panel is supposed to be Hoppa over the top angry.


PAGE 20

FLIP THE ARTWORK FROM PANEL 1 AND 2.

1-"ALRIGHT, ALRIGHT. LET'S ALL CALM DOWN A MINUTE."

5-"THAT'S NOT FAIR! SHE'S JUST A BABY!"

6-"I NEVER SAID I WAS A FAIR HARE."

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2-MAYOR: "HRMPH!" (missing word balloon)

3-"OK, SHELLY. YOU GOT THIS"  (wrong word balloon)

5-"WHEEE!"

6-"OK. HERE WE GO!" all one line across


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1. "HOP-PA!"    (Hoppa is sweaty is just a description not dialogue)

2. remove dialogue

5. "POPPA!"    (missing exclamation point)

6. Add tears to everyone

PAGE 23

1. Move word balloon to top right.

2 "NO. SHE DID IT, HOPPA." (missing period)

3. THIS PANEL IS SUPPOSED TO BE HOPPA.
"WITH MY ENCOURAGEMENT. WE'RE A TEAM NOW!

4-"HOPPA AND SHELLY FOREVER!"   (USE ARTWORK FROM PANEL 5)

5-"AND NOW.. IN HONOR OF OUR VICTORY.." (USE ARTWORK FROM PANEL 4)


NEW FINAL PAGE HOPPA, BUNNITA, AND SHELLY all dancing and happy. Hoppa is juggling heads of lettuce.

HOPPA-  "IT'S A SHELL-EBRATION!!"   Bold shell-ebration

SHELLY- "HA!"

BUNNITA-"OK. THAT WAS AN ADORABLE PUN." (smiling and laughing) bold THAT

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